In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. The result of this survey is presented in the following illustration.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariso

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In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. The result of this survey is presented in the following illustration.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustrations outlines the outcome of experimental flu vaccine given for big city female residents in June 1996.

Overall, as we observed, the success rate of flu vaccine was relatively low such as, number of cases of flu, account for death, and risk group high as well over the given period.

The line graph illustrates, flu rates of females was significantly high as compared to males. Analysis started on february with zero case then there is gradual increase on following months reached on 1000 females in April. The data of female patients climbed rapidly to 3000 on May which is higher than male flu rate with 2000. Flu rate growth dramatically surge to 3500 on June after that a systamatic decline in the figure to 2500 on september then stay steadily until december. Moreover, the number of male patient rate has moderate reduction after peaked up to above 2500 by june until remained stable on 1500 in last month of given period.

The bar graph represents, the total account for death on six consecutive months. However, surprisingly, the number of female death shows one percentage with absent of males during the month of march to may. Whereas, the proportion of female death exceeded to four which is double than males with two percentage on june to august

Finally, the pie chart provides information regarding the most danger category of new vaccine recipients.The overwhelming majority of aged females comprise of 35% risk which is 7% higher than non vaccinated group with 28%. Babies and hospitalized recipients shows the risk with 24% and 13% respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e overwhelming majority of aged females comprise of 35% risk which is 7% higher than non va...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, then, well, whereas, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 965.302439024 137% => OK
No of words: 263.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04562737643 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70328568105 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 106.607317073 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596958174905 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 283.868780488 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7030146789 43.030603864 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.636363636 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9090909091 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.23603664747 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147973424676 0.215688989381 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595450706439 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510825691507 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940925248802 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498222693118 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 40.7170731707 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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