The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton at 5 years intervals from 1908 in 2010.
Overall, the favourite attractions were the pavilion and the festival. In 1980, the figure of tourists to the pier was the lowest but in 2000 and the art gallery was the least popular.
In 1980, the figure for art gallery was to 22%, while the figure for tourists to the pavilion was roughly equal 24%. Then tourists to pavilion took off to nearly 50% in 1995. After peaking at almost 50% , the number of tourists experience a gradual fall over the period and finished the graph at 31%. Meanwhile the figure for art gallery grew sharply to 48% in 1985 and this went down exactly to 20% in 1990. The figure saw a consistent slump and hit a low point of nearly 8% in 2010.
On the other hand, the proportions of festival was higher than that of pier at any intervals.though at the period both figures were roughly equal. The number of tourists to the pier varied from 10% to 15% between 1980 and 2000, then it peak at 22% in the end of the period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...gallery was the least popular. In 1980, the figure for art gallery was to 22%, w...
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...figure for art gallery was to 22%, while the figure for tourists to the pavilion ...
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...hly equal 24%. Then tourists to pavilion took off to nearly 50% in 1995. After p...
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...24%. Then tourists to pavilion took off to nearly 50% in 1995. After peaking at ...
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...50% in 1995. After peaking at almost 50% , the number of tourists experience a gra...
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...e period and finished the graph at 31%. Meanwhile the figure for art gallery grew sharply...
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...8% in 1985 and this went down exactly to 20% in 1990. The figure saw a consistent...
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...d hit a low point of nearly 8% in 2010. On the other hand, the proportions of fe...
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...he number of tourists to the pier varied from 10% to 15% between 1980 and 2000, t...
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Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
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...% to 15% between 1980 and 2000, then it peak at 22% in the end of the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, then, while, as to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 904.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45320197044 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40162062417 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532019704433 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5555232323 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23202572225 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101350872976 0.103423049105 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208719073198 0.0843802449381 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217753032697 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.292359888236 0.0819641961636 357% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 85.02 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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