The line graph shows the number of video game discs that were bought in four months in 2014 from four different game stores and the pie chart shows the percentage of games that had highest sales over this time

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The line graph shows the number of video game discs that were bought in four months in 2014 from four different game stores, and the pie chart shows the percentage of games that had highest sales over this time.

The line graph shows the sum of video game discs that were bought in four months in 2014 from four various game stores, and the pie chart shows the percentage of games that had the highest sales over this time.

Overall, the most noticeable feature is that Cerium was the only store that experienced a steady increase in sales, while Bio shock Infinite was the best-selling game.

With regard to the line graph, The year 2014 witnessed a dramatically fall of about 1500 in the total of Gamestop from roughly 2800 to 1500 during the period shown, moreover, a significant drop of appropximately 1500 was experienced in the total of Ubihard at the same time. In addition, the figure of cyberium was experienced a marginal rise, prior to, witnessing a considerable rise from nearly 1800 to 3300 between February and April. In strark contrast, the figure of IGN remained stable at around 1000 during a period shown.

In terms of the pie chart, the portion of Bioshock infinite held onto the first place, followed by, the figure for Pokemon Plantinum, which doubled that of Far cry 3, with 30% and 28% respectively. Furthermore, the proportion of Assassin’s Creed Unity was nearly similar to that of others, with 15% and 13% in turn.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...the line graph, The year 2014 witnessed a dramatically fall of about 1500 in the total of Gamestop ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t around 1000 during a period shown. In terms of the pie chart, the portion of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, while, in addition, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1029.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85377358491 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63274742894 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 106.607317073 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608490566038 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9737547828 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 112.824112599 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2857142857 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365155352778 0.215688989381 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150612995191 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.289043878777 0.0843802449381 343% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253409608742 0.15604864568 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.347893278226 0.0819641961636 424% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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