Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
Nowadays, Obesity has become the serious case of concern for the worldwide countries, as children’s are following the sedentary lifestyle, as a result it has welcomed the <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-340F0BCE2EE0F3CF21B246955ADCC2E3" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_3062" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: many" data-pwa-suggestions="many" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="numerous" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">numerous</pwa> disease associated with it, which can be chronic or <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-82BDC327F57145BD6D0E1D6D42FA8759" data-pwa-rule-id="HYPHENATED_BIGRAMS" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing hyphen" data-pwa-suggestions="short-term" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="short term" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">short term</pwa> disease. In this <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-0E0AF4F8EE0C5D935E4D67D5697CAF16" data-pwa-rule-id="PREPPHRASE_MISSING-COMMA_CE" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Missing comma after prepositional phrase" data-pwa-suggestions="essay," data-pwa-heavy="true" data-pwa-dictionary-word="essay" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">essay</pwa> I will discuss the reasons behind <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-E83DDEAE3204ECFAC829EEFF0BB8FB39" data-pwa-rule-id="UN_COMMA" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="It appears that you have an unnecessary comma in a compound predicate. Consider removing it." data-pwa-suggestions="it" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="it," class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">it,</pwa> and suggest some <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-525A60B034ECD28EAB89D36C2E138C3B" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2886" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Possibly redundant word" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="possible " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">possible </pwa>solutions.
One of the main cause of the problem is giving less time to the physical activities, particularly in young age children’s <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-DB22177C1DF3F3B645067DDB63DEF841" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="are attracted" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">are attracted</pwa> to mobile phones as they prefer mobile games over going out, as a result, they have problems like obesity. For example, my cousin <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-47818B4D60155D6CE78E093F6186E67A" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_2250" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="who " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">who </pwa>is in school, few years back left his cricket club as he was now start enjoying the online games, which leads to <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-6990A7462BA6504B311AE4E384CB85B7" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="a problem~the problem" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="problem" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">problem</pwa> like obesity and he also started to feel fatigue. Another serious concern for children’s is also the fast foods which are easily available at very low cost, but they do not have the required nutritions for the young ones, as at young ages it a necessity to have all the required vitamins, as it help in all round development of children’s.
However, there are <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-9B879144F15DD8A532AF0EC6CEBC825D" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="a number~the number" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="number" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">number</pwa> of ways to tackle these problems, which <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-22999FA92A88DECE6B31AB47361CD704" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_465" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="certainly " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">certainly </pwa>should come from the parents, as children’s at <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7484B022462F5F7CBCE535576B6EB2A9" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="a young~the young" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="young" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">young</pwa> age are not aware about the things which are not good for them, parents can encourage their offspring’s <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-71DFA899E70A5A6EDA171256E4C9AE85" data-pwa-rule-id="GERUND_OR_INFINITIVE" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Prepositions such as '’ s' should be followed by a gerund (-ing) and not an infinitive." data-pwa-suggestions="being" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="to be" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">to be</pwa> active in outdoor sports which involve physical activities, for example, my aunt took my cousin to, day boarding school, which involve children’s in sports daily after school, which helped him to get rid from the obesity as he was active in <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-7287A64248A8C25C67D13FA8C0EA8652" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_3062" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: many" data-pwa-suggestions="many" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="numerous" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">numerous</pwa> activities. <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-930EB54DCBFA4BB1F51E2A50DA0E6690" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_814" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by using: Parents" data-pwa-suggestions="Parents" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="Furthermore, parents" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">Furthermore, parents</pwa> should concern the physician for the balance diet chart for their children’s so <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-9EB98D42CEEA360CC9C3578D386A6F11" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1514" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="that " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">that </pwa>they can follow all diet plan to help their children to have proper vitamins and proteins.
To conclude, <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-FB7F7221FB7BCBBB5213565A8CF8DC2B" data-pwa-rule-id="READABILITY_1091" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Readability may be enhanced by removing this" data-pwa-suggestions="(omit)" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="it is clear that " class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">it is clear that </pwa>main cause of the obesity is <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-C17F98C995F2C24966113175F9ECFF94" data-pwa-rule-id="DET_CG_2" data-pwa-category="grammar" data-pwa-hint="Possible missing determiner" data-pwa-suggestions="a sedentary~the sedentary" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="sedentary" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">sedentary</pwa> lifestyle and the unhealthy food habits, which children’s are following these days because of the lack of parental guidance, and this ailment can <pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-250D022EAFA09602B62064046AE1D821" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="be prevented" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done">be</pwa><pwa data-pwa-id="pwa-250D022EAFA09602B62064046AE1D821" data-pwa-rule-id="PASSIVE_VOICE" data-pwa-category="style" data-pwa-hint="Passive verbs make your writing less direct. Try to use an active verb instead." data-pwa-suggestions="" data-pwa-heavy="false" data-pwa-dictionary-word="be prevented" class="pwa-mark pwa-mark-done"> prevented</pwa> by the following healthy food habits with proper exercise .
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| 2019-11-03 | VINAY KHANDURI | 11 | view |
- Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth with poorer nations by providing them with things such as food and education? Or is this the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens? 11
- Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places? 11
- The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. 11
- Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered? 11
- The graph below shows the popularity of different fast foods in Britain and the trends in their consumption. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. 11
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...healthy food habits with proper exercise .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 7.0 429% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 1.00243902439 1496% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 3.15609756098 444% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 5.60731707317 696% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 33.7804878049 169% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 8942.0 965.302439024 926% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 657.0 196.424390244 334% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 13.6103500761 4.92477711251 276% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 5.06280665599 3.73543355544 136% => OK
Word Length SD: 14.9795523396 2.65546596893 564% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 322.0 106.607317073 302% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490106544901 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 2376.0 283.868780488 837% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 3.6 1.45097560976 248% => Avg_syllables_per_word is high.
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.07073170732 560% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 54.0 22.4926829268 240% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 590.671998424 43.030603864 1373% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 745.166666667 112.824112599 660% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.75 22.9334400587 239% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0171254531472 0.215688989381 8% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173141826775 0.103423049105 17% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0193757925498 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0157421867416 0.15604864568 10% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0030758012237 0.0819641961636 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 70.0 13.2329268293 529% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -152.53 61.2550243902 -249% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 27.4 6.51609756098 420% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 48.0 10.3012195122 466% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 62.55 11.4140731707 548% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.22 8.06136585366 139% => OK
difficult_words: 204.0 40.7170731707 501% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 45.5 11.4329268293 398% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.9970731707 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 63.0 11.0658536585 569% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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