The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Submitted by jasir on Sun, 08/11/2019 - 22:40

The given pie chart illustrates causes of soil depletion over the world, while the table presents data on percentage of land damaged by degradation in three various areas throughout the 1990s.
Overall, three prime factors lead to the decrease of land quality on a global scale, whereas in three particular regions they reflected in different proportions. Europe was the most affected area, whereas North America had the least proportion of deteriorated lands.
Regarding worldwide situation, the largest adverse effect comes from intensive grazing, which responses for over the one-third of the total detriment (35%), followed closely by clearcutting (30%). Moreover, 28% of farmland degradations are attributed to an excessive cultivation of crops, while the remaining 7% are determined by other factors.
With respect to the farming in selected regions in 1990s, North America had 5% of degraded lands. The principal element that reduced the usefulness of earth was over-cultivation. By contrast, in Oceania there was no land ruined by this activity. On the other hand, heavy grazing was especially serious concern of farmers in Oceania with 11.3% of unsuitable lands covered by this practice. Unlike mentioned regions, the main problem faced by arable lands in Europe was clear cutting of trees that accounted for 9.8% of spoilt lands.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, regarding, so, third, whereas, while, with respect to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1135.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45673076923 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83035097636 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663461538462 0.547539520022 121% => OK
syllable_count: 338.4 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.873738787 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.23603664747 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146995178354 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051727883091 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603636673222 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929992887837 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747288063031 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.63 8.06136585366 132% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 40.7170731707 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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