The pie charts below describe about the average of household expensitures in A country in 1950 and 2010

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The pie charts below describe about the average of household expensitures in A country in 1950 and 2010

it is often said that music has the power to unite and connect people, regardless of their cultural backgrounds or ages. I completely agree with this view, and will give my reasons below.

music can certainly reach across cultural and national boundaries and bring people together. Perhaps the best example of this would be the live Aid concerts that took place back in the 1980s, and which were broadcast to a global audience. Two live events were held simultaneously in the UK and the us, and the objective was to raise funds for famine relief in Ethiopia. The concerts were a huge success, both in terms of the number of people around the world who watched them and their impact on international public awareness of the famine. They demonstrated, I believe, that music truly is the planet’s global language.

Just as it transcends cultures, music also has the ability to connect people from different generations. regardless of age, we can all enjoy a memorable melody, a strong rhythm or a beautiful singing voice, and the best songs seem to have the same magical effect on all of us. this would explain why televised music competitions, such as ‘The X Factor’ or ‘The Voice’, are such popular prime-time shows. These programmes attract incredibly broad audiences because singing and popular songs appeal to children, parents and grandparents alike. I would argue that no other form of entertainment can bring families together in this way.

In conclusion, I believe that music is unique in its capacity to create shared experiences between people, irrespective of culture and age.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
it is often said that music has the power ...
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Suggestion: Music
...w, and will give my reasons below. music can certainly reach across cultural and...
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Suggestion: Regardless
...nect people from different generations. regardless of age, we can all enjoy a memorable me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, as to, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 965.302439024 140% => OK
No of words: 264.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10984848485 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7748144777 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 106.607317073 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 283.868780488 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.7674613029 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.769230769 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00922718178955 0.215688989381 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00389662212655 0.103423049105 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0134982950021 0.0843802449381 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00841964628988 0.15604864568 5% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145832551558 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 40.7170731707 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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