The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013

The pie charts compare the sales of online shopping for different categories between 2003 and 2013, a period of 10 years.
It could be seen that travel sector occupied the highest percentage about 36% in 2003 but this figure decreased slightly to 29% in 2013. There was a remarkable increase in the online sales of film and music category from 21% in 2003 to exact 33% which is the highest proportion in 2013.
In term of clothes sector, nearly a quarter about 24% was take into account in 2003, however this data dip to 16% in the next decade. In contrast with clothes sector, the proportion of books sold stood at 19% in 2003 and increase slightly to 22% in 2013.
Overall, there are several noticeable changes in the sale proportions of four different categories with music and travel sector occupied more than half of the pie during this 10 year period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... data dip to 16% in the next decade. In contrast with clothes sector, the proportion of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 711.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67763157895 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36424156082 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605263157895 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 201.6 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.7819959914 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.5 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29235886898 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153222791123 0.103423049105 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106433099034 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193578706307 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114309983488 0.0819641961636 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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