The pie charts show how the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

Essay topics:

The pie charts show how the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years: 1960 and 2010.

The four pie charts illustrate the changes in the employment rates of three different sectors in town A and town B during a period of 50 years, starting in 1960.
Overall, it can be seen that most of people were employed to perform sales-related jobs in 1960 in both towns. However, while this remaining true for town B in 2010, the manufacturing sector became the biggest employer in town A in the same year.
In 1960, the highest percentage of workers in both town A and B was recorded for the sales sector, with figures being at 41% and 72%, respectively. At the same time, an equal number of people worked in manufacturing and services in town A, at around 30%. In contrast, there were 20% of people working in services in town B, more than double the figure for manufacturing, at 8%.
In 2010, over a half of workers in town B, 54%, were sales people, while the equivalent figure for town A halved to 20%. The manufacturing sector, by contrast, experienced sharp increases in the employment rates, to its peak of 64% in town A and 24% in town B. 22% of people worked in services in town B, slightly higher than 16% in town A.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... in 1960. Overall, it can be seen that most of people were employed to perform sales-related ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45192307692 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69683684973 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533653846154 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.1132477645 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340380854584 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147592352614 0.103423049105 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565566368131 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215999792979 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323572450054 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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