The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

Essay topics:

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Illustrations below show a park for citizens when it was opened in 1920 and nowadays.

It is apparent that the place has underwent several changes that transform it to area well suited for people and different activities.

For instance, stage for musicians west of the center of the park was cut down. Instead, an amphitheatre for concerts emerged, with enough place for big number of the guests. Another example, the pond for water plants south-west of the center was replaced by children’s play area making possible kids’ entertainment .

Futhermore, a fontain in the middle of the park was replaced by extra rose garden with benches around.
Instead, a water feature occured in the right low corner of the map, so people do not have lack of water. Moreover, one of the rose garden was cut down and a cafe occured. Finally, entrance for undeground car park was established, making it possible to leave cars while enjoy being in the park.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'undergone'.
Suggestion: undergone
.... It is apparent that the place has underwent several changes that transform it to ar...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...area making possible kids’ entertainment . Futhermore, a fontain in the middle ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, moreover, so, well, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 793.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95625 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67934501387 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63125 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.0515517865 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.1111111111 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77777777778 5.23603664747 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157198012472 0.215688989381 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789478548838 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124965219966 0.0843802449381 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122597459881 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144632314211 0.0819641961636 176% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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