The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

the table gives information about the number of visitors to Ashdown museum before and after renovation. The given graphs illustrate the types of visitors for Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after the renewal of museum.
An overall, the rate of satisfied visitors rises after renewal. While the percentage of dissatisfied visitors declined. the number of visitors rose up after renewing as well.
For the period of the year before renewing, it was noticed, the proportion of very satisfied visitors was 15%. However, the percentage of satisfied visitors rose to 30%. Moreover, the percentage of dissatisfied visitors increased to 40%, whereas, 5% of visitors do not care about the survey.
For the period of the year after refurbished, it was witnessed the percentage of very satisfied visitors was 35%, which was more than doubled the rates before. While, the percentage of satisfied visitors went up to 40%, which was more than by 10% the year before. Finally, the rate of careless visitors still the same before and after renewal, which was 5%.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nt up to 40%, which was more than by 10% the year before. Finally, the rate of ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, moreover, still, well, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 896.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64254669991 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 77.0 106.607317073 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44 0.547539520022 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 283.5 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3823331313 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4545454545 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9090909091 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386498672044 0.215688989381 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173864977655 0.103423049105 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689032006382 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259615524255 0.15604864568 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715263845521 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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