The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The given table illustrates the data of sale of mobile phones from 5 brands from 2006 to 2009.

Overall, it is crystal clear that Samsung and Apple have the significant growth in selling their products while the others experienced some moderate fluctuations in their revenue during this period.

Among these 5 brands, Nokia was still best seller for smart devices when total of selling Nokia phones keep waving around 400 million each year and reached the vertex at 475 million in 2008. At the same time, Ericsson also culminated with its selling of 102 million before taking a nosedive to 28 million at the end of this period. Sadly, Motorola’s sales also substantially collapsed during these 6 years about 9 times lower in 2012 compared to 210 million selling devices in 2008.

In contrast, Samsung has the highest sales in 2012 at 396.5 million mobile phones sold, even passed on Nokia to become the best in that year after soaring from just 117 million at the beginning. Apple had the same event as Samsung despite of starting late from 2007 with only 2.3 million, this company noticeably took a jump to approximately 136 million in 6 years later and stayed just behind Samsung and Nokia in mobile phones market.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 33, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'still the best'.
Suggestion: still the best
.... Among these 5 brands, Nokia was still best seller for smart devices when total of ...
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Line 9, column 281, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ts selling of 102 million before taking a nosedive to 28 million at the end of this period...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1034.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43296613032 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612440191388 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 295.2 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1310663865 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.714285714 112.824112599 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8571428571 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143418021851 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711601862343 0.103423049105 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321912839446 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831547994817 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362489426326 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.2329268293 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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