task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where rele

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task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph illustrates changes of China and the USA in terms of the birth rates from 1920 to 2000.
Overall, both countries have a fluctuation over a 80-year period and the birth rate in the USA in most years was higher than that in China.
Looking first at the USA, we can see a mild fluctuation in the birth rates between 1920-1940, with the percentage hovering around 11-13% mark. Before falling a low point of 5% in 1945, the figure for the USA increased remarkably to exactly 15%, which was the highest point during the period of 80 years. In the following years, the US birth rate declined gradually to approximately 7% in 2000.
A similar pattern was repeated in China. Although it starts the year with a lower birth rate, the percentage of the Chinese birth rate overtook that of Americans to reach a peak of 20%. After that, there was a dip to around 7% in 1955. In the remaining time, the birth rate dropped constantly before going down to about 2%, lower than The Americans birth rate in 2000.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54395604396 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41958583324 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3040517547 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8888888889 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.22222222222 5.23603664747 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219731112716 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100493490713 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799088938964 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160833791927 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769038507816 0.0819641961636 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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