The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts provide the information about comparing the sales generated from online shopping in Canada between two different years (2005 and 2010).

In general, electronics and appliances had the highest sales among the four merchandise sold online in 2005, while food and beverages earned the biggest profit in 2010.

In 2005, majority of online shoppers bought electronic devices and appliances. In fact, the sales of these products made up one third of the total earnings combined from the four retail sectors. It was then followed by home furnitures, food and drink products who also had bigger sales to almost a quarter each. The least likely to be bought was the video games earning only 18%.

To compare, in 2010, online consumers bought more food and drinks than electronic devices. It was evident when a moderate increased of 10% was added from the previous sales of food and beverages garnering the biggest profit. In addition, video games had also a slight increased in sales (23%). Meanwhile, sales in electronic had a minimal decreased of five percent from its previous sales (35%) while sales in furnitures had plummeted to 15% making it the least to earn among the four online products.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then, third, while, in addition, in fact, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1008.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48789067284 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4653885293 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.8 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190965487888 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815247680039 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859908309112 0.0843802449381 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150507011864 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991958322599 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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