Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the table below.You should write at least 150 words.Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.

Essay topics:

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the table below.
You should write at least 150 words.
Allow yourself 20 minutes for this task.

The table above illustrates how people at different ages( from teenage to 70s ) in Someland entertain themselves by showing their figures of time spent on 6 main entertainments per year on average.

It is apparent from the diagram that young people tended to watch more TV/videos, for that people under the age of 30 spent 1200 hours and 700 hours on it respectively per year. While the figure encountered a rapid decrease when it comes to middle-aged people( 30s ), it climbed up gradually until reaching 1100 hours per year for the old( 70s+ ). The situation is similar in terms of cinema -- In both cases, teenagers and retired people spend around twice as much time as those who are at working age, despite the fact that people generally spent less hours (less than 100) in cinema.

As for socializing with people, the preference also varied from different ages. It is clear teenagers and people in their 20s prefer “big parties” involving 4 or more people, both spending 350 hours per year, which is 14 time of that of people above 70 years old. The situation changes when talking about small-scale socializing, which is most popular among people in their 30s and is more preferred by the old than the youth.

When it comes to exercises, the most notable point was that the old people above the age of 60 spent no time on group sports. However, they comparatively prefer to choose individual exercises -- people above 70 years old on average spent the same amount of time to do individual spots with teenagers.

In conclusion, people in different ages tended to choose different ways of relaxation. However, we can see a trend towards solitary and smaller group activities as people ages and that teenagers and retired people spend a lot more time on entertainment than those of working age do.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le at different ages from teenage to 70s in Someland entertain themselves by show...
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Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... when it comes to middle-aged people 30s , it climbed up gradually until reaching ...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ing 1100 hours per year for the old 70s+ . The situation is similar in terms of ci...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...te the fact that people generally spent less hours less than 100 in cinema. As for soc...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...te the fact that people generally spent less hours less than 100 in cinema. As f...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'as for', 'in conclusion', 'talking about']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250737463127 0.268076937826 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.109144542773 0.116061578633 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106194690265 0.0759168565197 140% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0412979351032 0.0366838410393 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0353982300885 0.0131127313244 270% => OK
Prepositions: 0.176991150442 0.155750635184 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0265486725664 0.0379272487307 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64391606519 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0206489675516 0.0210936926555 98% => OK
Particles: 0.00294985250737 0.00175180941692 168% => OK
Determiners: 0.0737463126844 0.0948980150116 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00294985250737 0.00437022459523 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0206489675516 0.00967000014798 214% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1812.0 1161.00487805 156% => OK
No of words: 312.0 196.9 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80769230769 5.90752243213 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 3.73763899035 112% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.304487179487 0.337110787985 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.217948717949 0.247514529752 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147435897436 0.171178102325 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11858974359 0.112407865282 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64391606519 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 106.607317073 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.546246751206 96% => OK
Word variations: 54.1038709578 49.3433353143 110% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 8.93414634146 123% => OK
Sentence length: 28.3636363636 23.0094962315 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7510330462 42.9750493124 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.727272727 135.714022679 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3636363636 23.0094962315 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.727272727273 0.689975730869 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.84146341463 130% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.48048780488 338% => OK
Readability: 50.1585081585 47.7609492067 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.44444444444 2.94281807926 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131812944442 0.418131533498 32% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.147603475547 0.181151798455 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.078263685947 0.0850326197045 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.683856158325 0.706616315825 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153794955931 0.157042692854 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743275968286 0.228904883108 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410881725004 0.108899403657 38% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.291105975426 0.367819155151 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.098301755648 0.0812612215331 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868508479147 0.316326947829 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383626897038 0.0921553760075 42% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70731707317 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.08536585366 73% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 3.16585365854 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.02926829268 99% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 7.1512195122 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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