The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.You should write at least 150 words.You

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The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.
Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.
You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs provided above illustrates the number of men and women employed in 6 main domains in Freedonia in 1975 and 1995.

It can be clearly seen from the first graph that in all the 6 sectors presented, the number of male employee exceeded that of female employees. The advantage of men were especially obvious in manufacturing, financing and public sector (defense) where the number of male employed more than doubled the number of female, with a surplus of about 400 thousand, 300 thousand and 200 thousand respectively. The slightest gap existed in the field of communication, where almost the same number of men and women were employed.It is also notable that wholesale and public sector(non-defense) are the sectors where the most female worked, reaching a number of 550 thousand and 650 thousand respectively.

20 years later, the job market has witnessed significant changes. While in most sectors, men were still the dominant, in communications and wholesale sector, the number of female employee surpassed that of the male workers, attaining an advantage of about 250 thousand and 100 thousand respectively. Furthermore, the female employees in banking and public sector( defense )also saw a great increase. However, manufacturing and public sector(non-defense) are the only two domains remained unchanged.

In conclusion, from 1975 to 1995, more women were accepted in workplaces, which was especially obvious in communications and wholesale sector.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237154150198 0.268076937826 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.110671936759 0.116061578633 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118577075099 0.0759168565197 156% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0592885375494 0.0366838410393 162% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00395256916996 0.0131127313244 30% => OK
Prepositions: 0.146245059289 0.155750635184 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0395256916996 0.0379272487307 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.16854927758 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00395256916996 0.0210936926555 19% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0909090909091 0.0948980150116 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00395256916996 0.00437022459523 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158102766798 0.00967000014798 163% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1461.0 1161.00487805 126% => OK
No of words: 228.0 196.9 116% => OK
Chars per words: 6.40789473684 5.90752243213 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.73763899035 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.412280701754 0.337110787985 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.320175438596 0.247514529752 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241228070175 0.171178102325 141% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.157894736842 0.112407865282 140% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16854927758 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521929824561 0.546246751206 96% => OK
Word variations: 47.9984644995 49.3433353143 97% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 8.93414634146 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.3333333333 23.0094962315 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.636898828 42.9750493124 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.333333333 135.714022679 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.0094962315 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.689975730869 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.48048780488 68% => OK
Readability: 57.350877193 47.7609492067 120% => OK
Elegance: 2.43181818182 2.94281807926 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470424871694 0.418131533498 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.163669605944 0.181151798455 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.147814325795 0.0850326197045 174% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.710884526297 0.706616315825 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.22792279054 0.157042692854 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.255192797069 0.228904883108 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117226595523 0.108899403657 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.416545777891 0.367819155151 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.188554500717 0.0812612215331 232% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.333936687276 0.316326947829 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112661716705 0.0921553760075 122% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70731707317 216% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.08536585366 24% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 3.16585365854 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 7.1512195122 112% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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