You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways.
What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Although some people would argue that we won’t change in any fundamental ways as we develop from young children to adults, I feel there are some marked differences in our social behaviour as we get older.
Firstly, most younger children tend to express themselves much more openly, naively than they do when older, showing great extremes of happiness and misery. However, when they are adults, they learn to hide their real feelings. For example, when adults feel tired from work, they do not show it but still try to complete the work. In addition, children, with their innocent mindsets, are inclined to do everything without calculations or assessments. For instance, they will play or talk with someone whom they like, regardless of his or her social position or age. Adults, on the other hand, tend to assign much weight to the partners’ achievements when they decide to build up the relationships. This leads to the second difference between young minds and older ones. Due to the indifference of children to social matters, their manners seem to be more straightforward than that of adults. Unlike mature people who might consider themselves inferior to those who bring them benefits, little kids treat everyone in the same way because they are unconscious of the rations for behaving distinctively.
Such changes like this are inevitable when a child grows up. However, whether they are good or not depends greatly on the degree to which children comprehend the reason for doing so. Therefore, in order for the positive effects to take place, appropriate instructions and guides should be provided. For example, when becoming teenagers, pupils need to be aware that they should show respect to those older than them, not just someone putting a good impression on them. When they are fully developed as adults, they should be taught more knowledge and experience to make a legitimate living.
In conclusion, children’s adaptions to how to treat people properly result from the influence of the individuals they are closely connected to. If parents want their kids to grow up becoming a kind of person behaving well, they should mind about the manners before teaching their little ones.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 10, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...al behaviour as we get older. Firstly, most younger children tend to express themselves muc...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'puts', 'putts'.
Suggestion: puts; putts
...those older than them, not just someone putting a good impression on them. When they ar...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 3.15609756098 444% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 5.60731707317 696% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 965.302439024 191% => OK
No of words: 361.0 196.424390244 184% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10526315789 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68550377783 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 106.607317073 201% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592797783934 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 283.868780488 193% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.07073170732 560% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7058823529 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.411764706 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2352941176 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 5.23603664747 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169430083969 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564249527357 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476267726625 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11672100058 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450506207371 0.0819641961636 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 40.7170731707 219% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.