Dear Sir
In response to a recent advertisement broadcast on TV, I would like to offer myself as an enlistee for the unpaid work at your hospital. I consider this a great chance to serve the patients and best utilise my spare time for humanitarian works. I am hoping that you would let me offer my service.
My parents are doctors and they devote their professional lives to serve people and the society as a whole. I am highly inspired by them and want to do something of my own for people who need care. What can be a better place to assist people than a hospital? Moreover, I have around two hours to spare each day in the evening and I live nearby. I would like to best use the superfluous hours of my daily routine in philanthropic work. I have previous experiences of doing some voluntary works for our community.
I can assist a professional nurse, take care of babies, help patients to move and bring them meals. I am, in reality, ready to learn to do any type of work to help people in this hospital. I can work from 5:00 pm to 7.00 pm every day except on Saturday.
Hope you hear your positive response and start my work soon.
Thanking You
Yours faithfully
Sara Sandler
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e voluntary works for our community. I can assist a professional nurse, take c...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... patients to move and bring them meals. I am, in reality, ready to learn to do an...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...f work to help people in this hospital. I can work from 5:00 pm to 7.00 pm every ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 5.60731707317 589% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 988.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49090909091 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55995867735 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604545454545 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 1.53170731707 783% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9741826294 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5714285714 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 5.23603664747 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380757165201 0.215688989381 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112065647585 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927650360171 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199379978691 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489561770342 0.0819641961636 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.2329268293 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 11.4140731707 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.