After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y

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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.
Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:
• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would you prefer? • Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter in reference to request a department change within the organization due to the below-mentioned reasons. Let me explain the situation.

The most prominent reason to switch my department is that I have recently completed my post graduation in sales and marketing from the University of West Australia. Although this was a one-year crash course which provided in-depth knowledge on various strategies required for closing more sales but on the other hand it also provided insights on increasing profitability. Additionally, as you are aware that I have been attached to the pre-sales department for nearly three years and have contributed immensely from the techno-commercial front in winning large scale projects, therefore, I believe that it is based on my past experience and the skills I have acquired during my master degree my preference would be to switch to the sales department.

Additionally, I believe that I have an overall experience of ten years which includes handling important transactions in a sales cycle including pre-sales, solution design and project management moreover with the recent completion of my post-graduate program I would be a right fit for the sales role.
I look forward to your response and hope that you would approve this department change request.
Yours Sincerely
Siad

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 622, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...efore, I believe that it is based on my past experience and the skills I have acquired during m...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e to switch to the sales department. Additionally, I believe that I have an overall exper...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, moreover, so, therefore, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 3.85567010309 389% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1141.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35680751174 4.54256449028 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17790094566 2.54303337028 125% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629107981221 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 117.213480453 44.8134815571 262% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 142.625 76.5299724578 186% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 16.8248392259 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 4.34317383033 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232350651118 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109349867837 0.0766984524023 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899558745008 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153524153156 0.12726935374 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946928399276 0.0580467560999 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 8.37731958763 204% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 70.7449484536 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 7.45979381443 196% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 8.71597938144 162% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 7.59969072165 128% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 41.2886597938 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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