The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began

Essay topics:

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The bar chart provides information participants of male and female in the Olympic from 1924 to 2012, while the line chart provides data of Olympic participants over 4 years period starting from 1924.

Overall, it can be seen that participants of male and female in the Olympic in 2012 is highest, and participants of Olympic always increase.

Looking at the bar chart in more detail, it is evidence that in 1924 there were hardly any women entering the Olympic whereas there were 3000 participants of male. Until 2012 the gap in the number of men and women who have entered in the Olympics has been significantly fell from nearly 3000 participants to approximately 1500 participants.

Moving to the line chart, it is clearly that the number of people who have entered the Olympics also rose in rage of over 2000 in 1924 to over 10000 in 2012. The most significant Olympic participants increase occurred between 1984 and 2012 from over 6000 to over 10000 participants.

Votes
Average: 7.7 (49 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 32.9175257732 18% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97575757576 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79524717963 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 127.690721649 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50303030303 0.622605031667 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 24.1206458362 44.8134815571 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 76.5299724578 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 16.8248392259 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279596935861 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155400412125 0.0766984524023 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041469571069 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183026673168 0.12726935374 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252759363968 0.0580467560999 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 8.37731958763 189% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 7.45979381443 169% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 41.2886597938 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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