Creative artist should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas in words pictures music or film in whichever way they wish There should be no government restrictions on what they do To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option
The freedom sector is often one of the first to be considered by government when discussing creative artist. However, there may be other essential limitations which also deserve due to consideration and resources. I feel that, while access to artists is certainly a vital component of any successful society, limitations certainly cannot be ignored.
Perhaps the most compelling reason why freedom of artists should be prioritized without any government’s restriction is because of the detrimental feeling of falling the rules can have on performance of artists. A dedicated and unrestrained environment is a cornerstone of any artists needed. If this environment is constantly disappear, then their explosive skills will be lost, confidence will slow, and there performance will shrink. This would in all likelihood lead them will not start to do the hard work, will not serve the society in better way. As a result they cannot provide them money.
However, the artist's interests should not be viewed in isolation. Another particularly essential part of society is holistic development of children. Controlling art works under the supervision of professional experts or agencies plays a vitally important role in children’s upbringing and education. Because art has been one of the main sources to educate children nowadays so that school curriculums encompass the all aspect of art, which have significant impact on their lifestyle as well as their long-term goals. Therefore, the decision as to whether government should restrict on creative artists must be taken in the context of the whole evolution of country.
My opinion is that art is made up many interdependent parts, and allowing any one of those parts to fail will cause a collapse of the entire system. I therefore feel that freedom of artists should not receive any special priority.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: disappeared
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...ll not serve the society in better way. As a result they cannot provide them money...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, i feel, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34129692833 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04298702945 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60409556314 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2972278938 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.333333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222498093178 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074956230731 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605444728853 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122312631319 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404121622893 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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