The chart below shows the expenditure of two Companies on consume goods in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows the expenditure of two

Companies on consume goods in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Anmol jjj on Mon, 10/07/2019 - 11:04

<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">The chart illustrates the amount of money

spent on five consumer goods (cars,

computers, books, perfume, and cameras)

in France and the UK in 2010. Units are

measured in pounds sterling

Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the period

given. Both the British and the French

spent most of their money on cars </span>whereas<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">

the least amount of money </span>was spent<span style="font-size: 19.36px;"> on

perfume in the UK compared to cameras in

France. Furthermore, the most significant

the difference in expenditure between the two

countries were on cameras.

In terms of cars, people in the UK spent

about 450,000 on this as opposed to the

French at £400,000. Similarly, the British

expenditure was higher on books than the

French (around £400,000 and £300,000

</span>respectively<span style="font-size: 19.36px;">). In the UK, expenditure on

cameras just over £350,000) was over

double that of France, which was only

£150,000.

On the other hand, the amount of money

paid out on the remaining goods was

higher in France. Above £350,000 was

spent by the French on computers which

were slightly more than the British who

spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the

countries spent much on perfume which

accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in

France but under £150,000 in the UK.‎</span><br>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
...omputers, books, perfume, and cameras in France and the UK in 2010. Units are ...
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Suggestion: Given
...sumer goods than France in the period given. Both the British and the French spen...
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Suggestion: Countries
...erence in expenditure between the two countries were on cameras. In terms of cars,...
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Suggestion: Higher
... paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. Above £350,000 was spent b...
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Suggestion: Spent
...re slightly more than the British who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the coun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, similarly, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 26.3917525773 171% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 937.175257732 140% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1023255814 4.54256449028 134% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.10185621952 2.54303337028 161% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497674418605 0.622605031667 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 317.7 290.88556701 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.13402061856 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 0.824742268041 728% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5688639382 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.2 76.5299724578 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 30.0 4.29896907216 698% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0586840517774 0.216113520407 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353689149123 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332410859554 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0209023515841 0.12726935374 16% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371353748119 0.0580467560999 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 8.37731958763 216% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.1 8.71597938144 208% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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