A company is organising a trip abroad for language training to a number of limited places. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter, you should:• express That you want to join• say why you think you should join• explain why the o

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A company is organising a trip abroad for language training to a number of limited places. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter, you should:
• express That you want to join
• say why you think you should join
• explain why the organisers should select you

Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to request you for attending in a language training program that AB firm held in Frankfurt, and I would like to be a part of this.

Actually, a few days ago I have received an e-mail with the content of a german language course for companies. This program is for one month which is located in Frankfurt. In this course, we will learn about structure of formal letters and business letter. The teacher of course is german person and has as much as experience in this field. I heard he had held too many business language periods in all the world as present.

As you know, I work as sale manager in export department. We have good trades with our german's customers. In my opinion, this program can improve our knowledge to have better communication with a large part of our clients, and I believe that we can effect on our customers.
I think, I am a suitable person for this trip because I perform my duties as manager of export department, and also have the most connection with foreign countries such as Germany and Austria. I have to say this program places are limited and we have enrolled in as soon as possible.
I look forward to hearing from you.

With regards,
Sarah Souany

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Smith
Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing to request you for atte...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing to request you for attendin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... and I would like to be a part of this. Actually, a few days ago I have received...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...s.this program is for one month which is located in Frankfurt. In this course, we...
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Line 4, column 411, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d too many business language periods in all of the world as present. As you know, I wo...
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Line 7, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e have enrolled in as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. W...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ave enrolled in as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Wi...
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Line 8, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I look forward to hearing from you. With regards, Mahsa kazemi
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd to hearing from you. With regards, Mahsa kazemi
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, look, so, i think, such as, you know, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1022.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5625 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62528849241 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566964285714 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2831563376 44.8134815571 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 4.34317383033 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156313084072 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668602601521 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555556978092 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104707023347 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512189478162 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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