During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to the businessman. In your letter
Remind him when and where you met
Tell him what king of job your interested in
Say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear John,
How are you? I am Jack Dane. Do you recall our acquaintance on board flight DC 365 last week which departed from New York to Washington? If it ring any bells to you, I’m writing to let you know that I would like to take your hand of friendship with regards to the job opportunity in one of your lucrative restaurants that you have suggested on that day.
After careful consideration, I have decided to choose my career as a supply chain analyst in your organisation. I have done my Masters in Business and Finance in the year 2001 followed by 15 years of successful career as a senior analyst in Amazon, an e-commerce company.
I am sure that I can thrive in hotelier industry as I have excellent exposure in dealing with inventory and warehousing management through use of several techniques like: FIFO- first in-first out method which will avoid spoilage of perishable goods, JIT- just in time inventory management where goods are ordered based on demand only and finally, WCM- world class manufacturing technique where waste will be reduced by eliminating activities which cause it.
Hope you find my profile interesting and awaiting your reply.
Faithfully,
Jack Dane
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rings'?
Suggestion: rings
...rted from New York to Washington? If it ring any bells to you, I'm writing to l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1015.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02475247525 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82853109893 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.712871287129 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.978112664 44.8134815571 295% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 112.777777778 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 4.34317383033 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141450446163 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619562061741 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698827423517 0.0603063233224 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880054744498 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834672457968 0.0580467560999 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 8.37731958763 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 8.71597938144 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.