During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Dear Mr.Richmond,

This is Yalda Asgari, we had a nice discussion during the Tehran- Istanbul flight on 26.Feb. I am writing with regards to your offer about a job in one branch of your chain restaurant.

As I said, I studied interior design at Iran University of Science and Technology and currently, I am working as a consultant in the design field. Since I am keen on this major, I have never limit myself to that course that present during academic years, so I continue my education in an institute which has a great reputation for up to date training course. I got some certificate for modern design.

I have extensive experience in this field and have done some successful project in cooperation with some well-known company and restaurants and this is the reason why I think I would be an appropriate candidate. I explore your website and found about your business aims which is reduction of hunger in the world by decreasing the waste amount of food. I have some special ideas about this goal.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Yalda Asgar.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Richmond
Dear Mr.Richmond, This is Yalda Asgari, we had a nice ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Feb
...uring the Tehran- Istanbul flight on 26.Feb. I am writing with regards to your offe...
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Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'limited'.
Suggestion: limited
...e I am keen on this major, I have never limit myself to that course that present duri...
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Line 11, column 213, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nk I would be an appropriate candidate. I explore your website and found about yo...
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Line 11, column 353, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...by decreasing the waste amount of food. I have some special ideas about this goal...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ome special ideas about this goal. I look forward to hearing from you. You...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, well, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 909.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86096256684 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75683879504 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652406417112 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2102711065 44.8134815571 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0678919427762 0.216113520407 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310322574414 0.0766984524023 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415555532625 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604402459521 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471812869209 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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