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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to the businessman. In your letter
Remind him when and where you met
Tell him what king of job your interested in
Say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Pramod,

this is Shyam and I hope you are doing great. With reference to our conversation during the recent flight journey, I am writing this letter to take forward our relation by detailing a bit about my interests and future
aspirations.

I remember that you travel to multiple places on a regular basis so it might be hard to recollect me. we met on an Indigo flight that took off from hyderabad at 6:30 am on 30th November 2020 and headed towards New Delhi. While we
were enjoying our coffee served by the air hostess, we happened to exchange our information regarding our professional interests. I must admit that was an eye-opening discussion where you spoke about importance of networks in today's world.

Even after achieving such a stature in society being the owner of Chutneys chain of restaurants, I found you to be a humble person and it was very kind of you to pass me information about the job openings at your hyderabad location. I am
very keen for the Senior manager role whose responsibilities include supervising and managing the reputation of the restaurant in local community.

Let me explain why I think I could be a great fit for this role. I hold a Masters degree in hospitality that landed me in a job where I got a chance to prove myself by utilising the opportunities. Although the role of Assistant manager in the initial stages of the career felt challenging,
I got a chance to enhance my skillsets that helped me excel into greater positions at the Swagat restaurant. I am currently working with them as a manager for more than 3 years. Also, I am looking for more challenging roles that can hone
my competencies. With this academic background and experience, I think I would be a great asset to your business.

Thank you for your consideration

Yours Sincerely
Shyam

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Dear Pramod, this is Shyam and I hope you are doing g...
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...ling a bit about my interests and future aspirations. I remember that you tr...
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...0 and headed towards New Delhi. While we were enjoying our coffee served by the a...
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...penings at your hyderabad location. I am very keen for the Senior manager role wh...
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...l stages of the career felt challenging, I got a chance to enhance my skillsets t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, regarding, so, while, i think, kind of, with reference to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 32.9175257732 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 937.175257732 164% => OK
No of words: 316.0 206.0 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86075949367 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92325596084 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 127.690721649 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604430379747 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 290.88556701 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.13402061856 164% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.6290185415 44.8134815571 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 4.34317383033 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.29896907216 209% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140348755892 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457926648256 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520987364456 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657357635368 0.12726935374 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603465990782 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 41.2886597938 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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