The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture depicts the figure for the Australian in five industries in the period of 50 years from 19662 to 2012.
Overall, services were the dominant major in Australia with the highest figure of five industries, as opposed to mining which was least developed with the least percentage of workforce. It was also noticeable that the data of construction witnessed no modification.
Regarding the figure for Australian workforce in Services, it began at roughly 51%, then which rose to 65% in the next two decades. There was a upward inclination of this figure, it rose from 72% in 1992 to roughly 79% in the final year. In terms of mining, it commenced at about 0.5% in 1962, then witnessed a minimal rise to about 1% in 1972 and the data of the next two decades is similar to the record of 1972. Next, the proportion of mining workforce in 2002 declined to 0,l% and finally increased slightly to 2%, which was lower than the figure of services by about 77%.
To talk about the figure for Australian workforce in manufacturing, it started at about 37% in the first years, after which observed a slight decline to 27% in 1972. From 1982 onward, the figure decreased considerably to approximately 11% and finished at 10% in the last year, which was higher than the figure of mining by approximately 8%. The agricultural workforce was recorded at 10% in 1962, which is identical to the record of manufacturing in the last year. There was a downward trend in the percentage of the agricultural workforce, dramatically decreasing from 9% in 1972 to around 5% in 2002 and finally reaching about 3% in the last year. The proportion of laborers working in construction major stayed unchanged throughout 50 years.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... 65% in the next two decades. There was a upward inclination of this figure, it r...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 32.9175257732 21% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 26.3917525773 273% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 937.175257732 153% => OK
No of words: 295.0 206.0 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85423728814 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86201685475 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477966101695 0.622605031667 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 290.88556701 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.691871935 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 76.5299724578 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0824295353809 0.216113520407 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354217606637 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369265059693 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672199617463 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386884012187 0.0580467560999 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... 65% in the next two decades. There was a upward inclination of this figure, it r...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, regarding, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 32.9175257732 21% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 26.3917525773 273% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 937.175257732 153% => OK
No of words: 295.0 206.0 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85423728814 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86201685475 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477966101695 0.622605031667 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 290.88556701 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.691871935 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 76.5299724578 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 16.8248392259 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0824295353809 0.216113520407 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354217606637 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369265059693 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672199617463 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386884012187 0.0580467560999 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.