The school which your kid attends is planning an overseas trip.They are looking for some parents to take the responsibility of the groups of children during the trip..Write a letter to school manager1. Explain why you are eager to do this2. Explain how yo

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The school which your kid attends is planning an overseas trip.They are looking for some parents to take the responsibility of the groups of children during the trip..
Write a letter to school manager
1. Explain why you are eager to do this
2. Explain how you can be helpful during the trip
3.Ask for more info about the trip

Dear Ms. Madline,

I am writing regarding the up coming school plan to bring students for a tour in another country during next holiday. I heard from your secretary, it will be a trip to Spain for visiting and also learning the language. Also she mentioned about volunteer
parents who would like to join and contributing. I would like to express my intention being part of this wonderful trip, specially I will be free during the time.

I have a friend owning a travel agency there in Barcelona and I believe he will support us. I can contact him and ask about activities we can do and also about information of a short Spanish course for children. He can recommend us some affordable accommodation to stay and reduce the expenses. As well as arranging transportation and some facilities.

Kindly provide me with some information about the departure time and date and number of days will stay there. Also, if I know the estimate budget of trip, I will ask him for a convenient and joyful package for children.
I will be glad to participate in this trip.
I am looking forward to having your respond.

Sincerely yours,
Jack's mom

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...isiting and also learning the language. Also she mentioned about volunteer parent...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uage. Also she mentioned about volunteer parents who would like to join and contr...
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Line 6, column 93, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...elona and I believe he will support us. I can contact him and ask about activitie...
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Line 13, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...respond. Sincerely yours, Jacks mom
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, regarding, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76381909548 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76342619409 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628140703518 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4558872223 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9230769231 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3076923077 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160792771523 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532190796036 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370264792316 0.0603063233224 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828518393985 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265665691317 0.0580467560999 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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