Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities Others however say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required Discuss both these views and give y

Making fundamental infrastructures in order to encourage people to exercise regularly for the health can be only a small part of helping them to think about their body. Therefore, there are many reasons preventing human beings to have healthy body: from life conditions to kinds of food that they consume.

For covering daily expenses, people have to work, but pressures and stresses from their employers and bosses would affect their mental health and make psychological disorders. Therefore, this unavoidable conditions cause to not think about their bodies and using sport facilities cannot be considered as priority for this group.

Another factor is related to lack of enough movement among people choosing to go to their workplaces by public transport systems or their private cars. Furthermore, they have to sit on their seats for a long time and forget their body health. However, for avoiding such issues, governments can foster people to biking to their works and can prepare infrastructures to make it easy for public use. Also, air pollution can be diminished by using public transport and bicycle to get works, that is one of the factors which is harmful for public health.

Unfortunately, foods are genetically manipulated and it causes harm on people’s health but profits that industry receives by selling these products cause governments don’t think more about public health.

To sum up, for using sport facilities, people should have enough time and free mind that nowadays, work conditions make people more busy to think about sport, unless it can be take places at the weekends that is not enough because they prefer to relax and spend time with family members rather than doing exercise. Therefore, governments should do fundamental works for example, diminish the work times, provide more healthier foods, use electricity instead of fossil fuels, encourage people to use public transport instead of cars and dedicate budgets for these factors, on the other hand educate people the way of proper living as, increasing the sport facilities has a little role among these all factors mentioned.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 413, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ample, diminish the work times, provide more healthier foods, use electricity instead of fossi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for example, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 26.3917525773 167% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 937.175257732 192% => OK
No of words: 339.0 206.0 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31268436578 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65635160078 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 127.690721649 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572271386431 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 290.88556701 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 16.3608247423 183% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.5070438353 44.8134815571 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.727272727 76.5299724578 214% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 30.8181818182 16.8248392259 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 4.34317383033 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198232584498 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837651299019 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411931013261 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118077966173 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342562537499 0.0580467560999 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 8.37731958763 227% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 70.7449484536 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 7.45979381443 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 8.71597938144 162% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 41.2886597938 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 8.54432989691 164% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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