Dear sir/ Madam
I am John from Florida city. I am regular patron of your online services. I am writing this letter to refund the cd player which I received yesterday.
To begin with I ordered the cd player of cosib company .yesterday after receiving I found that it was not working properly . Besides this, I found that it is broken from top at edge. Moreover I found that the cd player I orders is not of that company. I am completely annoyed after receiving the player.
So,i request you to please kindly refund my payment so that I bought player as per my requirement. I shall be highly appreciated to you for this.
Looking forward for a response from your side.
John
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...regular patron of your online services. I am writing this letter to refund the c...
^
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ne services. I am writing this letter to refund the cd player which I received ye...
^^
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...I ordered the cd player of cosib company .yesterday after receiving I found that i...
^^
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...I found that it was not working properly . Besides this, I found that it is broken...
^^
Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...und that it is broken from top at edge. Moreover I found that the cd player I orders is ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'order'
Suggestion: order
.... Moreover I found that the cd player I orders is not of that company. I am completely...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 3, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , i
...nnoyed after receiving the player. So,i request you to please kindly refund my ...
^^
Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...noyed after receiving the player. So,i request you to please kindly refund my ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, look, moreover, so, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 5.05154639175 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 26.3917525773 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 565.0 937.175257732 60% => OK
No of words: 123.0 206.0 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59349593496 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.33024571262 3.78020617076 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51389220259 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 127.690721649 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634146341463 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 166.5 290.88556701 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.4236110732 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.5 76.5299724578 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.3 16.8248392259 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197006074793 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725043827716 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670619626272 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126982669715 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726024530339 0.0580467560999 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 8.37731958763 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.45 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 41.2886597938 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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