Write a letter of complaint to a company outlining a problem you had while visiting one of their stores In your letter include what the problem was why this problem has upset you what you want to happen as a result of your letter

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Write  a  letter  of  complaint  to  a  company  outlining  a  problem   you  had  while  visiting one  of  their stores.  In  your  letter  include:
what  the  problem  was?
why  this  problem  has  upset  you?
what  you  want  to  happen  as  a  result  of  your  letter?  

Dear Sir / Ma'am,
Last week, 24th of July 2000 I had visited your store to buy a Plasma Line TV along with my family which includes my 3 children of age 9 to 12. I am writing to you, for bringing it to your notice and immediate action, that your store was screening offensive content when there was many minors present at the store, particularly the TV section.

I understand that your store sells variety of electronic stuff catered to the adult market but owing to the generalized non-age restrictive customers visit to your place I was expecting some kind of screening regulation in accordance to the national laws for public screening. I was shocked to see such explicit and offensive content. I approached to your floor supervisor and enquired about it who strongly stated that it is the customers mistake to bring in children along with them.

Therefore, I thought I had to write to you and express my concerns and the mental agony I had to go through because of your floor supervisor. I checked all the laws pertaining to the stores for TV screening it does state that you have to follow all the regulations accordance with public screening. So, I expect your action in reprimanding your staff to exhibit rudeness and irresponsible behaviour, and bring in strict policies to curb such screenings in future.
Thanking you

Sincerely,

Mark.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the store, particularly the TV section. I understand that your store sells varie...
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Line 4, column 278, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the national laws for public screening. I was shocked to see such explicit and of...
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Line 4, column 336, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ee such explicit and offensive content. I approached to your floor supervisor and...
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Line 6, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regulations'' or 'regulation's'?
Suggestion: regulations'; regulation's
...s state that you have to follow all the regulations accordance with public screening. So, I...
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Line 6, column 375, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nding your staff to exhibit rudeness and irresponsible behaviour, and bring in st...
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Line 6, column 455, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...strict policies to curb such screenings in future. Thanking you Sincerely, Mark...
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Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uch screenings in future. Thanking you Sincerely, Mark.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, therefore, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1130.0 937.175257732 121% => OK
No of words: 232.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87068965517 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78488855541 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594827586207 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.79228905 44.8134815571 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.555555556 76.5299724578 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 16.8248392259 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211564165677 0.216113520407 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918611409687 0.0766984524023 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487987565549 0.0603063233224 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147752001652 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391992645436 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 8.37731958763 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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