You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• give details of your study plans
• explain why you want to get a part-time job
• suggest how your friend could help you find a job
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sam,

I am excited to inform you that I will be moving to England, during Spring next year, as I have got admission
to pursue my 'Certified Internal Auditor' course. I am wrtitng to you to seek help to find a part
time job for me during my stay in England.

My course spans over a period of 4 months begining on 7th April next year. I am required to attend lectures
during the mornings and will have some course work to be submitted every 10 days. My evenings will
be relatively free and hence I would like to utilise this time to work. As you are aware, I am
funding the course myself and would like to have some supplementary income to fund part of the
tution fees as well as to pay for my stay whilst in England. I understand you are working for an
audit firm 'PWC' and they are looking for part-time interns. It would be great if you could
arrange to send them my resume and arrange for an interview. Having the PWC tag under work experience
will definitely add value to my resume for any future job prospects.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,

Tommy

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...m wrtitng to you to seek help to find a part time job for me during my stay in England. ...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...his time to work. As you are aware, I am funding the course myself and would like...
^^^
Line 10, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...supplementary income to fund part of the tution fees as well as to pay for my sta...
^^^
Line 11, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and. I understand you are working for an audit firm PWC and they are looking for ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, so, well, as to, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40776699029 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32726364941 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582524271845 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5538914341 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.29896907216 279% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189218129235 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817504808431 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648986141437 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832890473312 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561412946528 0.0580467560999 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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