You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Anna,
Hope you and your family are doing amazing. I am reallly excited to tell you that I got an offer letter from my dream university at Australia. This letter is being written to seek your kind assistance in finding a suitable part-time for me.
As you must know that I was waiting for this opportunity for a very long time.Finally I got admission in Master degree programme of dentistry at Grifft University Brisbane.According to the schdule, I will have to complete twenty hours of study per week.
Besides from the study time, I am going to have enough time to do some part-time job. In fact, I really want to get the job because its my responsibility to take care of my daily expenses such as home rent, grocery shopping.
As you already living there from last five years. Therefore, you have a good knowledge of finding a job for me. Being from similar medical backgrounds , you have complete knowledge of my profession like which part-time job would be best for me.
I reallly appreciate your help. Convey my regards to your parents.
Yours lovingly,
Manvir

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Anna, Hope you and your family are doing amazi...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Finally
...r this opportunity for a very long time.Finally I got admission in Master degree progra...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...r this opportunity for a very long time.Finally I got admission in Master degree progra...
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Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: According
...dentistry at Grifft University Brisbane.According to the schdule, I will have to complete...
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Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...t, I really want to get the job because its my responsibility to take care of my d...
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Line 4, column 172, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...its my responsibility to take care of my daily expenses such as home rent, grocer...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es such as home rent, grocery shopping. As you already living there from last five...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... Being from similar medical backgrounds , you have complete knowledge of my profe...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...egards to your parents. Yours lovingly, Manvir
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, if, really, so, therefore, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78842504667 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63829787234 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5672058269 44.8134815571 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.4166666667 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 4.34317383033 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374386326658 0.216113520407 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139478885209 0.0766984524023 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500540175045 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186749797375 0.12726935374 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620455419866 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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