You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Mike,
How have you been? It has been a long time since we last met. I will be moving to Australia soon to pursue my master in business management at the University of Perth. It will be the beginning of a new journey in my life to live and study in a foreign country. I feel so relieved that at least you are there to help and guide me.
The university allows me to work part-time for 20 hours a week. I believe it is a great idea to work in a retail outlet so that I can earn some extra bucks to support myself while I am here in Australia. Secondly, it will enable me to take off the extra burden from my parents as I will be contributing to my course fee and thirdly I will also get exposure to the working culture which can help me in future job prospects.
The last time we spoke I remember that you worked in a retail giant Walmart as a general manager. I am sure you will have a lot of contacts there. I would really appreciate if you could recommend me in one of Walmarts retail outlets so that I can work there as a part-timer.
I look forward to your reply and seeing you soon.
warm wishes
vinshu
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...at I can work there as a part-timer. I look forward to your reply and seeing y...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Warm
...d to your reply and seeing you soon. warm wishes vinshu
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, at least, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 909.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.11312217195 4.54256449028 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36199095023 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58371040724 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1913865346 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9230769231 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223495333727 0.216113520407 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882244488719 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072018866686 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160590258608 0.12726935374 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673246166664 0.0580467560999 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 8.37731958763 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.26 8.71597938144 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.