You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports center that you visit.Write a letter to the managerWhat the problem isHow you feel about the problemWhat steps you want the manager to take

Essay topics:

You are not satisfied with the changing room in a sports center that you visit.
Write a letter to the manager
What the problem is
How you feel about the problem
What steps you want the manager to take

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to complain you about the problem faced when I had visited your sports center.

I was very enthralled when I came to know that our cricket match has been organized in your sports center. However, as we entered in the changing room, locks of the locker facility were working improperly which was quite disturbing.

I felt miserable because we all had traveled from other cities and we were unable to keep our personal belongings such as Mobile phones, Wallet at safer place. Moreover, I have heard many good things about your sports center and it was unexpected from prestigious firm like yours.

I would like to recommend you several things to untangle this issue. Firstly, you should repair our locks as early as possible. Secondly, you can also purchase an electric locker room where you do not have to worry about the locking mechanism.

I hope, you will address this issue as soon as possible and reply me at your earliest convenience.

Yours faithfully,
Mohit Ratnu

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
...r cities and we were unable to keep our personal belongings such as Mobile phones, Wallet at safer ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 854.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93641618497 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44604990662 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.687861271676 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.654592972 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2754414457 0.216113520407 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106966649864 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912282417509 0.0603063233224 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159885900472 0.12726935374 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11182597459 0.0580467560999 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.