You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall.
You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.
Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:
• describe what the group does
• explain why the group is good for the community
• suggest alternative days and times for practice
Dear Manager,
My name is Bosede Michelle the music director of Daystar music band and am writing to enquire about the possibility of rescheduling our weekly meeting at Oak hall to different days so you can still accommodate us, this is to ensure we remain close to the children of the Marojo community we train voluntarily.
The group primary aim is to preserve the traditions and culture of our people, we also go to schools to educate children on the culture and way of life before the advent of technology. our group is important to the community as we are the only musical band at this terrain.
we are hoping to move the meetings from Monday and Thursday to Saturday nighy 12:00 am, so that we can retain the useage of the hall.
I called your customer service and it was confirmed the hall remains unused by the members of the community.
Thank you and hoping to hearing from you soon.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Manager, My name is Bosede Michelle the music dir...
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...usic director of Daystar music band and am writing to enquire about the possibilit...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt days so you can still accommodate us, this is to ensure we remain close to the...
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Suggestion: Our
...f life before the advent of technology. our group is important to the community as ...
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Suggestion: We
...he only musical band at this terrain. we are hoping to move the meetings from Mo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t we can retain the useage of the hall. I called your customer service and it wa...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unused by the members of the community. Thank you and hoping to hearing from you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 743.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6149068323 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51234366359 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 127.690721649 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.1919249896 44.8134815571 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 123.833333333 76.5299724578 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 16.8248392259 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 4.34317383033 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155980374178 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784102503044 0.0766984524023 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325884640489 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820568845933 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028125308659 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 70.7449484536 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 8.62886597938 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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