You are planning to give a presentation in your large company. Write a letter to your colleague asking for help.
In the letter, you should:
when and where the presentation will be
what the presentation is about
what you would like your colleague to do.
Dear Paloma,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you this mail as I need some guidance from your end, regarding the recent professional development course that I had attended in Dubai. The school wants me to give a short presentation, to the other teachers and staff on 22nd August during our meeting hours in the library.
The presentation is mainly going to cover, planning of curriculum by merging the IB philosophy with the Reggio Emilia methodology and some of the basic information about the seminars that took place. Additionally, I have to give few suggestions for the implementation of differentiation in the various classrooms.
I have prepared some notes and a power point presentation, that I have attached with this mail. If you could please proofread it and give some feedback. I would also appreciate, if you could come on the day of the presentation.
Thanking you in advance, would be waiting for your response.
Warm Regards,
Grace.
- Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is individuals responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views a 84
- All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same number of holidays in a year or people doing different jobs enjoy different amount of holiday time. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 73
- More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages? 61
- Recently many people know a few of their neighbours What is the cause of this problem What can be done to solve this problem Give reasons for your answer and any example from your own experience 87
- Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines.Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... with the Reggio Emilia methodology and some of the basic information about the seminars th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ferentiation in the various classrooms. I have prepared some notes and a power p...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03703703704 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07318148576 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66049382716 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.172789843 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232499649958 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852258094606 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695031024943 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142453650379 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580036340619 0.0580467560999 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.