You go to a gym to carry out exercise everyday One day you have forgotten your bag in the gym and the gym management has announced that they wold keep the gym closed for a week for some renovation work You need your bag as it has some important things in

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You go to a gym to carry out exercise everyday. One day , you have forgotten your bag in the gym and the gym management has announced that they wold keep the gym closed for a week for some renovation work. You need your bag as it has some important things in it.

Write a letter to the manager of the gym. In you letter
Introduce yourself and describe your problem.
give a description of your bag.
Tell them what you want them to do.

Dear Sir ,

I am Kamalpreet Kaur. I am gold member in your gym and my membership no is A01234. I generally go to the main branch of your gym and preferably workout in the morning batch 6 AM to 7.30 AM. However I was running late today for an important meeting and in the hustle, I forgot my bag in the locker B29.

My bag is black wild-craft bag. It has my essential official documents, my driving licence and one external hard-disk. I have scheduled meeting out of station for which I am leaving day after tomorrow. I would need my bag as it has all the substantial document for my meeting. I called the receptionist and got to know that gym will remain close for a week. I request please allow me to enter the gym premises to take my bag and if that is not possible then I have given description of my bag to the receptionist. She can take my bag from locker and hand it over to me outside the building.

Let me know, which option is feasible as I am looking forward for a positve response.

Yours faithfully,
Kamalpreet

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
Dear Sir , I am Kamalpreet Kaur. I am gold mem...
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Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir , I am Kamalpreet Kaur. I am gold member i...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ld member in your gym and my membership no is A01234. I generally go to the main b...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...our gym and my membership no is A01234. I generally go to the main branch of your...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bly workout in the morning batch 6 AM to 7.30 AM. However I was running late toda...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... in the morning batch 6 AM to 7.30 AM. However I was running late today for an importa...
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Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng out of station for which I am leaving day after tomorrow. I would need my bag ...
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Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he substantial document for my meeting. I called the receptionist and got to know...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d got to know that gym will remain close for a week. I request please allow me to...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...that gym will remain close for a week. I request please allow me to enter the gy...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oking forward for a positve response. Yours faithfully, Kamalpreet
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Line 10, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sitve response. Yours faithfully, Kamalpreet
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 844.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35051546392 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6737775015 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59793814433 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5432247853 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.9230769231 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9230769231 16.8248392259 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76923076923 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246203039171 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931112161231 0.0766984524023 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552287307595 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142249862412 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738229614628 0.0580467560999 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 8.37731958763 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.36 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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