you have bought a new laptop from a reputable company and in a few days of purchase discovered major problems.write a letter to the company. in your letter:say when you bought itexplain the problemssay what action you would like the company to take

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you have bought a new laptop from a reputable company and in a few days of purchase discovered major problems.write a letter to the company. in your letter:
say when you bought it
explain the problems
say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction for a laptop that i bought from your company.I purchased it a week ago on Saturday in 13th of July. After two days, it has not worked perfect, I found major problems.The eject button of Cd player does not work.It has problem with its graphic card,I can not see any image. moreover,I can not use autocad application that needs graphic card.Sometimes the laptops screen suddenly getting dark and none of the keyboard does work.
Therefore I want to fix it as soon as possible.I called to your company two days ago and they promised me to repair it for about 48 hours.Unfortunately, after two days, no one has contacted me yet.I will wait just for a day.If my problem does not solve, I will complain to customer service association management.
I look forward to your reply.

yours faithfully,
Simin Jalali

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...ss my dissatisfaction for a laptop that i bought from your company.I purchased it...
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... laptop that i bought from your company.I purchased it a week ago on Saturday in ...
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Suggestion: The
... worked perfect, I found major problems.The eject button of Cd player does not work...
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Line 2, column 210, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
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... worked perfect, I found major problems.The eject button of Cd player does not work.It ha...
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...eject button of Cd player does not work.It has problem with its graphic card,I can...
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...ork.It has problem with its graphic card,I can not see any image. moreover,I can n...
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Line 2, column 316, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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...s graphic card,I can not see any image. moreover,I can not use autocad application that ...
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...c card,I can not see any image. moreover,I can not use autocad application that ne...
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...cad application that needs graphic card.Sometimes the laptops screen suddenly getting dar...
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...rk and none of the keyboard does work. Therefore I want to fix it as soon as possible.I ...
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...re I want to fix it as soon as possible.I called to your company two days ago and...
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...ised me to repair it for about 48 hours.Unfortunately, after two days, no one has contacted m...
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...r two days, no one has contacted me yet.I will wait just for a day.If my problem ...
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...acted me yet.I will wait just for a day.If my problem does not solve, I will compl...
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Suggestion: Yours
...ment. I look forward to your reply. yours faithfully, Simin Jalali
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Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eply. yours faithfully, Simin Jalali
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.48453608247 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 724.0 937.175257732 77% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82666666667 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9903548656 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.706666666667 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 216.0 290.88556701 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.2456348216 44.8134815571 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 120.666666667 76.5299724578 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 4.34317383033 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112644346146 0.216113520407 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535505621408 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388031657465 0.0603063233224 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639959265751 0.12726935374 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023161274399 0.0580467560999 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 8.37731958763 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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