You have recently moved into a company accommodation and you are facing some issues at the place. Write a letter to your HR department. In the letter, mention:•A brief description of your accommodation.•What problems are you facing?•What do you expe

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You have recently moved into a company accommodation and you are facing some issues at the place. Write a letter to your HR department. In the letter, mention:
• A brief description of your accommodation.
• What problems are you facing?
• What do you expect the company to do about it?

Dear Mr James,

I am writing in connection to express my dissatisfaction about the accommodation provided to me by company in New York City. I came here for analytics training for six months and organization has provided me studio apartment near to the training center.

The apartment is fully furnished and it has an amazing view of the city. However, the heating system is not working properly.
As you know, winters are going on and it would be difficult to adjust in below zero degree temperature without the heating unit. I even complaint to the leasing office but to know no use.

I would request you to please either talk to leasing office and rectify this or provide me new place to stay as soon as possible.
I will look forward to hearing from you soon on this.

Yours sincerely,
Kanwal Kohli

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...new place to stay as soon as possible. I will look forward to hearing from you s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 679.0 937.175257732 72% => OK
No of words: 142.0 206.0 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78169014085 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69284025025 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 127.690721649 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.683098591549 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 290.88556701 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6037765074 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4444444444 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7777777778 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125605852554 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464268882269 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439200378359 0.0603063233224 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.061068561488 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403049096261 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

here is my letter on the same prompt:
Dear Jane,
I am writing to you to express my dissatisfaction with the apartment, which I was recently relocated to, at our company's accommodation complex. The flat in general is one bedroom, as I requested, with a kitchen and bathroom. It is located in the central tower where we have the main restaurant.
I am facing several issues in this accommodation; which require your kind attention.
First, having the central restaurant on the same building made it extremely noisy, especially that it closes at 2:00 AM. This is significantly making sleeping a tedious endeavor on daily basis.
Secondly, it is obvious that there is a hazardous malfunction in the firefighting and fire alarm systems. Yesterday for instance, I got a false fire alarm around 4:00 AM, we all had to evacuate the building to discover 30 minutes later that there was no actual fire incident. Moreover, I have checked the expiry date of the fire extinguishers; surprisingly, I found out that they should have been maintained 45 days ago.
It would be highly appreciated if you can address the aforementioned issues. Here are some suggestions that I expect the Administration team in your department to take in order to tackle what I am facing here:
1- If the operation hours can be limited to force the restaurant owner closing at no later than 11:00 PM, especially that there are no employees coming for dining service after then.
2- I suggest that facility management team approach the contractor who is responsible for the maintenance of the firefighting system in order to perform all preventive and corrective maintenance works in order to ensure that we are completely protected against any fire hazard.
I am looking forward to hearing from your some positive news about the necessary course of actions.
Sincerely,
Osama.