you have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child

Essay topics:

you have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Dear Sir / Madam
My name Muhammad Abdurrohman
Iam Student
Iam writing this letter to inform about my interest to getting job in your home

Actually, I saw an advertisement in an austalian magazine yesterday when I opened my gadget and that make me interested to apply for this job because I have a lot of leisure time now because I was finished all of my task in my college. I have a lot of experince about look after children when I lived in Indonesia, because I have four brother in my home and also I have knowledge to knowing character of people especially children, because I take psychology in my college. If you accepted my apply for I ready to work as soon as possible start from Saturday until thruesday except Friday, because I have responsibility to manage my organization every Friday.
Thank you for giving the mater your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon

Your faithfully

Muhammad abdurrohman

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 336, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'brother' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brethren', 'brothers'.
Suggestion: brethren; brothers
...lived in Indonesia, because I have four brother in my home and also I have knowledge to...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83346598519 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6804123711 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 16.3608247423 244% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.4837949069 44.8134815571 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.5 76.5299724578 253% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.5 16.8248392259 241% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147566372535 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859128350124 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159689259518 0.0603063233224 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.04860098686 0.12726935374 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646187202942 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 8.37731958763 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 70.7449484536 44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 7.45979381443 253% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 8.62886597938 319% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 8.54432989691 211% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 336, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'brother' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brethren', 'brothers'.
Suggestion: brethren; brothers
...lived in Indonesia, because I have four brother in my home and also I have knowledge to...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83346598519 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6804123711 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 16.3608247423 244% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.4837949069 44.8134815571 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 193.5 76.5299724578 253% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.5 16.8248392259 241% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147566372535 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859128350124 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159689259518 0.0603063233224 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.04860098686 0.12726935374 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646187202942 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.3 8.37731958763 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 70.7449484536 44% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 7.45979381443 253% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 8.62886597938 319% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 8.54432989691 211% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.