You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with familiy for six month an look after their six years old child

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an australian magazine for someone to live with familiy for six month an look after their six years old child

Dear sir/ madam

My name is bagussetyo

Jam a lobs seekers

lam writing this letter to inform about I want apply this work

Actually, two weeks ago I leave my company. And I need this jobs for pay my credit home and I must buying foods for my son. im very suffer because I don't have money again. So that I decide for apply. everyday I feel confuse and worry about this problem its make me not happy to enjoy life. Hopefully you will accept and allow me for this employment

lam very competent for doing this, since I have much experience and knowledge, jam diligent and suitable for work in your home, and I always come fast and not late. think I the best person for help you

I have been make a plan for visit my family and after that I want go to holiday for relax my mind and my friend suggest me for find good food in Australia its will make me very busy..

Thanks for giving the matter your attention, I hope to hear your reply soon

Yours faithfully

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by user Muhammad Abdurrohman :

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Im
...ome and I must buying foods for my son. im very suffer because I dont have money a...
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Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ds for my son. im very suffer because I dont have money again. So that I decide for ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Everyday
...oney again. So that I decide for apply. everyday I feel confuse and worry about this pro...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective, and the comma is missing. Did you mean 'every day, I'?
Suggestion: every day, I
...oney again. So that I decide for apply. everyday I feel confuse and worry about this probl...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lam
...ept and allow me for this employment lam very competent for doing this, since I ...
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Line 11, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Think
...e, and I always come fast and not late. think I the best person for help you I hav...
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Line 13, column 156, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...gest me for find good food in Australia its will make me very busy.. Thanks for ...
^^^
Line 13, column 182, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... in Australia its will make me very busy.. Thanks for giving the matter your at...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 10.0 26.3917525773 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 796.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32608695652 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.06647558927 2.54303337028 81% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.5559051697 44.8134815571 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 16.8248392259 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14219565491 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658701639812 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516739557267 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0677263110359 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543136274181 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 8.37731958763 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 70.7449484536 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.13 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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