You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays You decide to apply for the job Write a letter to the director of the Museum In your letter introduce yourself explain what experience and

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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays.
You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:
• introduce yourself
• explain what experience and special skills you have
• explain why you are interested in the job

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in the job vacancy at the City Museum Shop which you have posted in an advertisement in yesterday's newspaper. And, I was wondering if you would like to interview me for the vacant position at your City Museum shop

My name is Shwatank Bhasin, and I have been studying in the final year of my Master's in Data Science from UBC college. Since my previous job involves checking accounts and keeping safe records of the stocks. To some extent, my skills are matching with skills described in the roles and responsibilities in the job description for this particular position.

Apart from this, I am very keen to work part-time at the museum shop during the Christmas holidays time because I cannot go back to my hometown which is on another continent. Also, I need to manage my finances which could be helpful to me save a good amount of money. Lastly, this job will give me a great opportunity to interact with many customers, thus, this will improve my communication and marketing skills.

I would be grateful if you will consider me for this position.

Yours Sincerely,
Shwatank Bhasin

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, so, thus, apart from

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73384344833 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.9152211384 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.111111111 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 4.34317383033 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245164958969 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969420811409 0.0766984524023 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890195677506 0.0603063233224 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159112002537 0.12726935374 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127781609913 0.0580467560999 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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