you successfuly passed a job interview you were told to strart your work on july 10th but unfurtunatley you can not attend your workplace on that day write a letter to your new employer in your letter express your appriciation for the interview explain yo

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you successfuly passed a job interview.you were told to strart your work on july 10th but unfurtunatley you can not attend your workplace on that day.write a letter to your new employer . in your letter:
express your appriciation for the interview
explain your situation
suggest a solution.

Dear Mr Smith,
I would like to appreciate you because of the interview day that you accepted me for the position of a supervisor in your institute. I always wanted to have this job. I am writing concerning this position that I am due to begin on 10th July. But,there is a problem.
As I say in my interview, I lived in another city and it is far from there.Though, I can find an apartment in that city and it is near my new workplace, unfortunately, the previous tenant has not left the house yet. so, I can not move in to my new apartment up to ten more days.
I realise this will be unacceptable for you, but I hope, given the circumstances, you will let me to work on this place two weeks later than planned. I can promise working hard to make up these delays and preparing all the documentaries you need at the end of the month.
I would like to emphasise that I need his job and I am very keen on working with you to get more practical experiences.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
simin jalali

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 246, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...that I am due to begin on 10th July. But,there is a problem. As I say in my interview...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Though
...n another city and it is far from there.Though, I can find an apartment in that city a...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ious tenant has not left the house yet. so, I can not move in to my new apartment ...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ries you need at the end of the month. I would like to emphasise that I need his...
^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...you to get more practical experiences. I look forward to hearing from you. Your...
^
Line 8, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rom you. Yours sincerely, simin jalali
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27040816327 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75534295999 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612244897959 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9882908685 44.8134815571 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0909090909 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 4.34317383033 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268469323123 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897356849313 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779544302469 0.0603063233224 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116785261344 0.12726935374 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548102153384 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 8.37731958763 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.19 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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