You work in a busy but poorly organized office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.
Write a letter to your employer. In the letter
ask to be considered for this job
explain why you would be a suitable candidate
outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make
Dear Mr. Dim,
I am Oprah Huang and I have been working for three years in your organization as a graphic designer in the marketing department. This letter requests you to consider me as the supervisor of the marketing department. I feel I am ready to take on this challenging role.
In the past, I have received qualifications in marketing and design and I have gained a lot of experience working in this industry. Moreover, I took a course as a leader for one and a half years and I trained in eCommerce and digital marketing as well. Furthermore, I am a hard-working and honest employee, and willing to work extra hours any time. In addition, I am familiar with the fundamental principles of management such as organizing, planning, and motivating matters.
As you are aware, many of the operating systems that we use are out of date and a lot of errors occur frequently. For this problem, I will manage a new team to streamline the operating line to update these systems so that the offices can run smoothly and effectively. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Emma
- These days it is easier than ever for people to travel to different places As a result many locations that used to be free of tourists have now become popular tourist destinations Do you feel this is a positive or negative development 64
- You have recently bought a Wi Fi router from an online shop The web page said that the router would be setup to connect to the internet automatically but so far you have not been able to get a connection Write an e mail to the online shop In your e mail s 56
- You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit Write a letter to your friend In your letter explain the important event apologise for the situation suggest a new arrangement 73
- You have a friend who lives in a city abroad You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in this city Write to your friend and explain what you would like to do tell them what type of work or studies you have been d 73
- Too much emphasis is placed on testing these days The need to prepare for tests and examinations is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners To what extent do you agree or disagree What other measures do you think m 61
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Dim, I am Oprah Huang and I have been working...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, well, i feel, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 897.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69633507853 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00551834779 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586387434555 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.0 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0290160843 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 4.34317383033 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190017340329 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704021781938 0.0766984524023 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059833125709 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128684937529 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643546629003 0.0580467560999 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.