Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip
Dear Madam,
I'm writing this letter to express my willingness to join the three-day school excursion program to France that is planned for next month.
I just stumbled upon an advertisement posted in the school website while I was paying the second term fee online for my daughter, this morning.
The post indicated that you are looking for a parent to go with the school group which will go for a three-day trip to France.
I'm a parent of Tia (Student Code: E0027) who is studying in your school since 2015 and she is in fifth grade now.
I have been to France twice as part of business trip but I always wanted to visit the place along with my daughter. I see this is a wonderful opportunity
to travel abroad, spend quality time with my daughter and help the other students to have smooth and seamless trip.
I'm an HR by profession and I have organised business trips to various countries. Given this experience, I can help you in completing the necessary
paperwork for the visa application. I would like to bring it to your kind notice that I am fluent in French and I can be a tour guide and translator,
as I understand from my daughter that most of her classmates are native English speakers. Though the advertisement indicated that the trip will be planned
for next month but there was no detail about the date of travel. It would be great if could let me know the likely date of travel and the budget per
person.
I hope that I would be a suitable person to go with the group as I can play a dual role of tour guide and translator. I'm truly excited about this travel
and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you in anticipation.
Kind Regards,
Anna
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Madam, Im writing this letter to express my willi...
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...ll go for a three-day trip to France. Im a parent of Tia Student Code: E0027 who...
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...r. I see this is a wonderful opportunity to travel abroad, spend quality time wit...
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... see this is a wonderful opportunity to travel abroad, spend quality time with ...
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Suggestion: I'm
... to have smooth and seamless trip. Im an HR by profession and I have organise...
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...can help you in completing the necessary paperwork for the visa application. I wo...
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Suggestion: Paperwork
...help you in completing the necessary paperwork for the visa application. I would like ...
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...nd I can be a tour guide and translator, as I understand from my daughter that mo...
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... can be a tour guide and translator, as I understand from my daughter that most...
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...classmates are native English speakers. Though the advertisement indicated that the tr...
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...dicated that the trip will be planned for next month but there was no detail abou...
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...likely date of travel and the budget per person. I hope that I would be a su...
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Suggestion: Person
...ly date of travel and the budget per person. I hope that I would be a suitable...
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Suggestion: I'm
...dual role of tour guide and translator. Im truly excited about this travel and I...
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...r. Im truly excited about this travel and I am looking forward to hearing from yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 32.9175257732 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 937.175257732 151% => OK
No of words: 309.0 206.0 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58252427184 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.537357172 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 127.690721649 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543689320388 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 412.2 290.88556701 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.808102146 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.13333333333 4.34317383033 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.29896907216 279% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 2.54639175258 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229925204015 0.216113520407 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718271832689 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745797099317 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828862811444 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076109308151 0.0580467560999 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.