Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what

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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.

Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
Say why you would like to go on the trip
Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Sir or Madam,
Hope this letter finds you in a good health.I am glad to know that school has decided an overseas trip for children this time.This is a great initiative by shool.I am writing this letter to tell you that I am sending my daughter Shayana to this trip.I am also thinking to join this group.
I came to know from her that it is a Dubai trip.I have been there for more than thrice due to my work.Have explored many new things during my long stay.I am pretty much familiar with many places especially restaurants.
Furthermore,I can recommend some places for outdoor activities so that students will have fun.The very famous "Burj Khalifa" will be an added attraction.Students can enjoy the entire view of Dubai from the top.
With regard to the tour description received yesterday,what kind of transportation facility are we going to use?Also, would like to know about the breakdown of fee structure.
Looking forward to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Shikha M.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...o hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Shikha M.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, kind of, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9349112426 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91831776049 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.710059171598 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.28137374 44.8134815571 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 139.0 76.5299724578 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 16.8248392259 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 4.34317383033 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 2.54639175258 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17460833241 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762431762259 0.0766984524023 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553213726644 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757643038073 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609803960236 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 8.37731958763 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 70.7449484536 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 7.45979381443 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 8.62886597938 313% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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