Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips.Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter:– Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school– Explain

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Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips.

Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter:

– Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school
– Explain why you are interested in the position
– Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children

Dear Sir or Madam,

My daughter attends your school, and has recently informed me that you are looking for long-term volunteers to attend school trips. I am the mother of Saffron Monsoon; she is in fourth year, in Mrs Bonham-Carter’s class.

I thought that since I have such a long relationship with the school I would put myself forward. I think I might be better prepared than most as I was a primary school teacher for over four years before having my daughter and leaving my career.

I work from home the vast majority of the time and so I am looking for opportunities to participate in community events to make sure that I interact with other people, and I couldn’t help but think that I’d be a perfect fit for your science trips.

Do give me a call if there are any places still available.

Yours truly,
Barbara Townshend

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g my daughter and leaving my career. I work from home the vast majority of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, still, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 710.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73333333333 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87793135583 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.706666666667 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 207.9 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.3370943512 44.8134815571 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 76.5299724578 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218016455404 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910870968903 0.0766984524023 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833087047744 0.0603063233224 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111132772091 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759547610873 0.0580467560999 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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