Some people say that the best way to improve public healthy is by increasing the number of sport facilties. Others, however, say thatthis would have little effect on public healthy and that measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
A healthy is being is being one of problems in modern-life style and lack of awarenesses makes this condition getting worst and a little effect, probably, would affect to public but a superb decision are required as a good stepb to develop a council healthy., so I wil conflincting both of statements to extent my opinion.
Inclining several sport facilities may be rated the best way to rise public healthy but we have to argue that consumption pattern also has to be changed because food which we eat contributes to healthy as well. In addition, sicknesses like obesitas, high blood pressure and so on, are surging year by year due to consumption habit. Because of it, we should wise up to maintain our healthy maximally, so we are prevented from any illness caused by our manner.
Furthermore, campaign toward ough to be run beacause death rate is rising and society have to realize that their eating manner obtained in junk food, high-fat food, cigarrete cause healty worst. More over, many stores or supermarkets can sell those products easily without any rules, so government as the only one institution is worth to make regulation which relates which these conditions. High rate tax, perhaps, is solution to push customer buying those products and the tax also could be used inclining sport facilities. For example, by installing some excercises equipments in park and this will be another benefit because people will be attract to use facility which is provided by government relatively cheaply.
In my opinion, people should encourage that healthy is not only reached by physically activity but also good eating habit also is another criteria to develop healthy by keeping away from any unhealthy food.
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A healthy is being is being one of problems
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
but a superb decision are required
but a super decision is required
we have to argue that consumption pattern also has to be changed
we have to argue that the consumption pattern also has to be changed
and society have to realize
and society has to realize
Sentence: For example, by installing some excercises equipments in park and this will be another benefit because people will be attract to use facility which is provided by government relatively cheaply.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to excercises and equipments
High rate tax, perhaps, is solution to
High rate tax, perhaps, is the solution to
Sentence: In my opinion, people should encourage that healthy is not only reached by physically activity but also good eating habit also is another criteria to develop healthy by keeping away from any unhealthy food.
Description: The fragment by physically activity is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace physically with adjective
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and criteria
people will be attract to use
people will be attracted to use
Sentence: A healthy is being is being one of problems in modern-life style and lack of awarenesses makes this condition getting worst and a little effect, probably, would affect to public but a superb decision are required as a good stepb to develop a council healthy., so I wil conflincting both of statements to extent my opinion.
Error: stepb Suggestion: step
Error: conflincting Suggestion: conflicting
Error: wil Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition, sicknesses like obesitas, high blood pressure and so on, are surging year by year due to consumption habit.
Error: obesitas Suggestion: ?
Sentence: Furthermore, campaign toward ough to be run beacause death rate is rising and society have to realize that their eating manner obtained in junk food, high-fat food, cigarrete cause healty worst.
Error: ough Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: beacause Suggestion: because
Error: cigarrete Suggestion: cigarette
Error: healty Suggestion: health
Sentence: For example, by installing some excercises equipments in park and this will be another benefit because people will be attract to use facility which is provided by government relatively cheaply.
Error: excercises Suggestion: exercises
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