Some people say that education system is the only critical factor to development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many people believe that the only and most important factor in development of a country is its education system, but at the same time others claim that there are other critical factors that have an important role in development.
We must acknowledge importance of education for preparing next generations for the future. Usa is a good example in that case at the beginning of the World War II and after the war. Because they needed researchers, many people in those days studied basic science and educated in physics, chemistry and mathematics. After the war, however, need for engineers was important, therefore more and more people started majoring in engineering. Another good reason is well-being of the society. With proper education system, societies become well developed and advanced. Living in such societies helps individuals to grow and develop. For example, Canada with good education system is an ideal country to live in and grow.
On the other hand, many point out that education is just one factor for development and there are other factors which are as important as education. With too much emphasis on the role of education, people forget about other vital factors that are necessary for full development . because balance is very important and developing just one aspect creates nations with just one ability. Although these societies are well-educated, they may not be happy. Because nature of men is not just having good education and being knowledgeable, there are other important aspects which needs development in order to have a good, full and balanced life. USSR is a good example of these societies and shows us why well-educated nations are not necessarily happy in their life.
In short, although having a well-developed education system is very important, it is not enough and there are other factors as well which need development and attention.
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Thanks for your time, but I
Thanks for your time, but I think there has been a mistake. I got score of 5.5 out of 9. My statistics were good. Number of words 305 of 350,but I wrote ielts writing task 2 which should be 250 words. I would like revaluation according to criteria for ielts task 2.
Thanks in advance
The criteria is for ielts
The criteria is for ielts task 2.
250 words are the minimum for IELTS task 2. You can write whatever you can. But around 350 words are suggested by testbig site.
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The issue of the essay is not about how many vocabulary words, but about the flaws we listed for you:
1. No. of Different Words: 154 200 //need more different words for the essay
2. what are those important factors that are necessary for full development? and why they are important too. You didn't mention and argue.
flaws:
No. of Different Words: 154 200
and what are those important factors in the third paragraph?
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 305 350
No. of Characters: 1538 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.179 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.043 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.555 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5