Advertisement has been common in today s society Many people deem that advertisements targeted at children should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree with this standpoint

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Advertisement has been common in today's society. Many people deem that advertisements targeted at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this standpoint?

In light of the fast-growing proliferation of the Internet and technological devices, advertising is becoming more and more popular in everyday lives. It is highly recommended that advertisements aimed at children should be prohibited. While advertising may indeed have some potential drawbacks, i believed that it should not be banned because of the substantial benefits offered to kids
On the one hand, widespread advertising poses numerous threats to children that are worthy of consideration. To begin with, advertisements targeted at children are highly suggestible, which triggers their buying decisions. In this case kids cannot yet define what is ultimately their best self-interests. Frequent exposure to commercials such as toys or clothes stimulates their unreasonable desire to buy these kinds of products. As a result, once their requirements are not met by their parents, kids would probably throw tantrums to any other people around. In addition, there is a problem that certain advertising products are conveying the message of beauty standard or stereotype, thus, leads to erroneous beliefs of children. It can be seen that many cosmetic advertisements have already created the idealized female beauty and unintentionally promoted the message of which is the more favorable and desirable skin color. Children bombarded by these types of TVC do not have the capability of making judgment, hence, absorb the knowledge or viewpoint they access. Gradually, these distorted knowledge leads to the consequence that kids detest their skin color or even the worst scenario, are racist against back-skinned people
On the other hand, regardless of all aforementioned drawbacks, I agree that there should not be a ban on advertising aimed at children because of several social values. Firstly, advertisements make a contribution to developing good eating habits for children. For instance, television ads of Mayonnaise, a company providing the sauces to accompany salad and numerous other healthy foods, often have compelling and eye-catching visual effects. These TVCs arouse kids’ interest in vegetables, a genre of food that they consider as something unattractive and unsavory. The more frequently children watch these videos, the more vegetables or healthy products they will probably consume. Moreover, a great deal of advertisers tend to convey the messages of kindness and sympathy to children in their advertising campaigns, by taking “Vươn cao Viet Nam” of Vinamilk as an example. Children when coming to contact with this TVC will generate by far sympathy and mutual love for children in mountainous areas. These captivating messages have a positive impact on kids’ personality development.
In conclusion,despite the fact that advertisements have some negative impacts on children, there is no need for people to get rid of advertisements from our daily lives. Children have the opportunity to reap tremendous benefits from advertising, including stimulating their healthy eating habits and moral development, among others.
In light of the fast-growing proliferation of the Internet and technological devices, advertising is becoming more and more popular in everyday lives. It is highly recommended that advertisements aimed at children should be prohibited. While advertising may indeed have some potential drawbacks, i believed that it should not be banned because of the substantial benefits offered to kids
On the one hand, widespread advertising poses numerous threats to children that are worthy of consideration. To begin with, advertisements targeted at children are highly suggestible, which triggers their buying decisions. In this case kids cannot yet define what is ultimately their best self-interests. Frequent exposure to commercials such as toys or clothes stimulates their unreasonable desire to buy these kinds of products. As a result, once their requirements are not met by their parents, kids would probably throw tantrums to any other people around. In addition, there is a problem that certain advertising products are conveying the message of beauty standard or stereotype, thus, leads to erroneous beliefs of children. It can be seen that many cosmetic advertisements have already created the idealized female beauty and unintentionally promoted the message of which is the more favorable and desirable skin color. Children bombarded by these types of TVC do not have the capability of making judgment, hence, absorb the knowledge or viewpoint they access. Gradually, these distorted knowledge leads to the consequence that kids detest their skin color or even the worst scenario, are racist against back-skinned people
On the other hand, regardless of all aforementioned drawbacks, I agree that there should not be a ban on advertising aimed at children because of several social values. Firstly, advertisements make a contribution to developing good eating habits for children. For instance, television ads of Mayonnaise, a company providing the sauces to accompany salad and numerous other healthy foods, often have compelling and eye-catching visual effects. These TVCs arouse kids’ interest in vegetables, a genre of food that they consider as something unattractive and unsavory. The more frequently children watch these videos, the more vegetables or healthy products they will probably consume. Moreover, a great deal of advertisers tend to convey the messages of kindness and sympathy to children in their advertising campaigns, by taking “Vươn cao Viet Nam” of Vinamilk as an example. Children when coming to contact with this TVC will generate by far sympathy and mutual love for children in mountainous areas. These captivating messages have a positive impact on kids’ personality development.
In conclusion,despite the fact that advertisements have some negative impacts on children, there is no need for people to get rid of advertisements from our daily lives. Children have the opportunity to reap tremendous benefits from advertising, including stimulating their healthy eating habits and moral development, among others.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 32.0 10.4138276553 307% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 24.0651302605 283% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 122.0 41.998997996 290% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 5198.0 1615.20841683 322% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 920.0 315.596192385 292% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.50740426846 4.20363070211 131% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22183814317 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.282608695652 0.561755894193 50% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1605.6 506.74238477 317% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 4.76152304609 378% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 16.0721442886 249% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9039202351 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.95 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.175 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 8.67935871743 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272949005319 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841091736363 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721784592481 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173803884911 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375374794521 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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